Five Sentence Fiction – Scarlet

I chose to use the following definition of Scarlet:

scarlet |ˈskärlit|
adjective
chiefly dated (of an offense or sin) wicked; heinous.
• immoral, esp. promiscuous or unchaste.

Her skin shone a brilliant shade of white – somewhere between silver and ivory – against the blackness of the night.

There was something so liberating about meeting him each night in the safety of the forest, far from the prying eyes of those cloistered mortals she called kin.

She knew if they were discovered she’d suffer the ultimate death; wantonness was no more tolerated in their speck-on-the-map town than blaspheme.

In fact in the eyes of the village, wantonness was far more heinous, especially when the offender was a woman.

She wondered what sort of agonizing death they would concoct for her, the scarlet wife of the preacher.

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18 responses to “Five Sentence Fiction – Scarlet”

  1. Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver) Avatar

    For some reason your story has encouraged me to keep saying ‘wantonness’ out loud. I love that word now!

    Your story is a slow burn, knowing the consequences adds quite a dimension of heat to the affair. Nicely done, Angie :))

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      I love the word too lol! Thanks for the lovely comment Jo-Anne 🙂

  2. Sandra Avatar

    Nice work – I liked ‘cloistered mortals’.

  3. Charron's Chatter Avatar

    I like that the theme is scarlet–yet you start out with a well-described white! Great write, and I’m wondering…where does all this “5 sentence” come into play? Or rather, where do the prompts originate?

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Check out Lillie McFerrin’s blog for more details. There’s a link at the bottom of this post. She’s the Queen of Five Sentence Fiction 🙂

  4. lisashambrook Avatar

    I like the word ‘heinous’ too! Your story even comes across with a slightly supernatural feel, with talk of her pale skin, the ‘cloistered mortals she called kin’ and such strong ramifications for her wrongs…a very interesting piece Angie!

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Thank you Lisa! I had fun with this week’s word 🙂

  5. injaynesworld Avatar

    “…the scarlet wife of the preacher.” I love that use of the prompt. This whole piece painted such an interesting, rebellious woman. You left this reader wanting more! Good job.

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Thank you! 🙂

  6. Regina West Avatar

    Oh man, I love this one. Of course, I love romances, especially sordid, hidden ones that happen in the woods. You could make this into a longer piece quite easily.

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Thank you for your feedback!

  7. Steven (@ashviper) Avatar

    Ah, wonderfully written! And very visual!

  8. Lillie McFerrin Avatar

    I really like the way you went with Scarlet!! Wickedly well written 🙂

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Thanks Lillie! And thanks for the awesome prompt 🙂

  9. Lizzie Koch Avatar

    I love your take on the prompt; the use of scarlet and the language you have used. Typical though that the woman faces a grissly end compared to that of the man in your what seems to me a medieval village but could stand today in some parts of the world. . . . very thought provking and beautifully written. xx

    1. ajjrichmond Avatar

      Thanks Lizzie for your wonderful comment 🙂

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